Final number #15

After looking back at those two blog posts i personally dont think i achieved the goals i set up for my self. the reason why i say that is because im not impressed with the some of the work i did in this class i know i could of done way better if i took more time on certain things. i wouldnt change any of my goals because i dont like going back on words but knowing what i know now i would work harder.

i would like to develop on things i started developing on like not waiting for the day before my paper is due to work on it. i also liked the fact that we did peer review that helped me alot with my writing. i think i still need to keep working on building around my foundation give my papers more and more facts and information.  

in other words i think i didnt do as good as i think i could do. now i know that i need to start from the get go and work very hard and dont take any time my teachers gives me in class for granted.

#14

for my portfolio I'm going to rewrite the should the obama age drop out analysis paper. the strength of my paper was the introduction i think i worked really good on the intro and i states my thesis very well and i also states my argument. my weakness of my paper i think is that i didnt focus that well on my topic and i didnt fully understand the article i read so i winged it.

to effectively rewrite my paper i must re read the article many times so i can better understand the article and understand what the arthur is talking about. i think once i do that my paper well overall be better because i will have more information to talk about. i will also back up my arguments and make sure that i have information to back up my statements.

Lucky number 13

i have learned a lot about peer review, i'm starting to really think about how it helps me with my papers a lot.

i've learned a lot because in one of my essays the writer had a very good argument but since his tone wasnt affirmative one i wasnt really convinced. i think that he had a great idea and explained his points every well but his tone wasnt the right one, because when you are trying to argue with someone you need to be every affirmative. you want to make sure the person thats reading your paper is scared of you and wont bring up a certain topic with you.


another thing i learned from reading other peoples essays is that in an argument paper you must have a great conclusion. the reason why i say that is because in my eyes when you right a paper you start with a starting a pitcher and then you bring in the relief pitcher and then the closing pitcher is the the concluding paragraph. so the concluding paragraph must be as good as the rest of the paragraphs and also it must restate your argument and give the final blow.

#12

I think my most compelling evidence is that dwayne wade has had the best nba finals performance in nba history.the reason why i say that is because he has had the best stats in the finals and also brought his team back from being 2-0 in a 7 game series and averaging 39 points in the last 4 games to bring his team back to win the championship in only his 3rd year in the nba.

my weakest evidence is that dwayne wade has only won one championship. while the Great Micheal jordan has won it 6 times and also has had memorable performances in the finals. like playing while having a fever and playing with an injury. but i still stand by my choice because Wades performance was amazing because i witnessed him win the 4 games in the row while only being so young in the nba and going up against  the best team in the nba at that time.

Assignment #10

i think peer review helps a lot in the process of writing papers. even though i don't show it in class sometimes i think that it helps a lot because i learn a lot from my peers. one way we can improve peer review is to make it serious is we need to be serious about the whole thing because i can tell you that I'm not always paying attention and so is some other people. i think we have a good amount of time when it comes to peer review its just no one takes it serious. my ideal peer review process is everyone having the papers done when there due so we can grade them and everyone taking it serious.

assignment # 9

my plans for college are to major in justice studies. this class fits perfectly to my major i think. the reason why i say that is because to be a lawyer you need to be able to write a lot of paper to fight for your client. i think this class is the stepping stone to doing that there are many classes to take after this class so i can try to prefect that. but you always need to start at the beginning and this is the class to start at.

Assignment #11

the errors I've noticed that i usually do on each paper are grammatical errors i think this error is something easy that i can fix i just need to be more patient with how quickly i write things.

  I've been told by many teachers that i always have a good foundation but i can never completely help hold up my paper. i think once i start to help build my paper more i think i can be a great paper writer.

another error that i tend to due is my conclusion i always find it hard to close out a paper. the reason why i think i mess up on that is because i am tired and already mentally darned that i just give up at the end and i think once i stop doing that i will be ok at that part.

 those are three things i need to work on and i am starting to work on them and i think after I've been told so many times to fix these errors I've finally understood that i need to fix them.

"Blow Your Mind"

Purpose: The purpose of this is ad is to sell food of course. But they took a whole different approach by having a girl with her mouth open and saying it will blow your mind away. 
Audience: I think the Audience of this ad is everyone but especially men. The reason why i say men mostly is because it has the 3 favorite things men like. Food, Girls, Sexual Meaning. what i mean is that the word Blow means in slang is when a girl gives Oral Sex.
Genre:this add was every strange, especially coming from burger king. i was shocked when i seen this ad because i wouldn't think that burger king would stoop so slow just to sell a burger. 

Assignment #6

well this paper is a whole different ball game. its like i went from playing basketball to playing soccer. the reason why i say that is because our first paper we talked to do a narrative paper and we had to talk about ourselves from our point of view. in this paper we are talking about ads and how they are most of the time wrong in so many ways. in this paper im going to have to do some research about the certain brand thats being advertised in my ad and also who its targeting. after i do that i have to try to put myself in the ad makers shoes to see what he was trying to sell.

Assignment #3- "Good" Papers

the difference between a good paper and a bad paper is quality over quantity. what i mean by that is i would rather right a 2 page paper that explains everything clearly than right a 6 page paper and no one understands what i said. To me the three things that separate a good paper from a bad paper are. the structure of the paper, also grammar.

Quality over quantity- you want your paper to be informative, you don't need a 6 page paper just to make yourself look smart.If you write a short paper with a lot of detailed information to me that's a better paper.
The Structure- When your building a house, the first thing you do is generate the ideas of how you want the house to look like, then you build the foundation. Same thing with a paper you  can't just start writing you need to think things clearly. just like how you need a foundation when your building a house you need one also when writing a paper.
Grammar- The most important thing you could mess up on in a paper. You need to make sure that your paper flows good and also that your paper has correct spelling.

I think the easiest thing for me is the structure of the paper. i dont just sit down and right. i think things clearly and i make sure it makes sense in my head i also make sure it flows perfectly.

My Topics

The first topic that came to my mind when i heard we have a paper due, i felt like talking about who the best player in the NBA is from my perspective. I might argue that Dwayne wade is the best player because he is the best at his position. Than i might argue that Kobe as edge over him because he has more championships than wade. The good thing about this topic is that its a very interesting topic because basketball is a very popular sport. The bad thing about choosing this topic is that i might run out of things to talk about.



Another topic i might write about is  telling your parents about a bad report card or keeping it a secret so you wont lose your car keys. i think this would be a good topic. i could talk about how its a good idea to tell them right away because parents don't like it when you lie. I could also talk about its a good thing to keep the report card away from you parents because i like my car and i know i would lose it if i get bad grades.


Another topic i have in mind is if i was president of the united states and how i would run this country. i think this would be an excellent topic because its everything i want to do as president and how i would help this country so much. The other things i would talk about in this topic is how i would try to achieve world peace. the pros and cons about this topic is i think the pros are everything because who wouldn't want to be president and the con about this topic is that it would never  happen.

The Reason why im that the class

the reason why i am taking english 101 is because its a required class. the reason why i think NEIU makes this class a required one is because they want us students to learn how to write good paper and the reason why they want that to happen is because they want us to be successful in life. i really want to improve on my writing skills.

my weakness in english are spelling. i am a bad speller, i couldnt spell if my life depended on it. So hopefully in class class i get to expand my vocabarly and i get familiar with alot of words and i also hope i get to learn how to write papers better.